my poem.. what do you guys think?

[02_Si]

I wrote this for my girl because she is always saying that she doesn't know why I am with her (typical girl)... let me know if it sucks or if it's good:

So I guess you can't think of the things that describe,
the person you see yourself that you are inside.
So let me just tell you the things that I see,
when your beautiful eyes are looking at me.
I see a smile that takes me to a place far away,
and how one thought of your face can brighten my day.
I see the moon and the stars that shine from the skies
that light up and dance in your royal blue eyes.
You have the best personality that I've seen to be true
I didn't know angels from Heaven were beautiful as you.
And even when we're just hanging and there nothing to do
things just seem better when I'm hangin' with you.
I can tell about people, see, right from the start
I can see you are loving and have a good heart.
That you're a wonderful person and I want you to see
that this is the way that you are to me.

[BlackWolf]

Im not much one for love poems, I find them dorkey and cheesy but it does sound good, I guess. :confused:

[02_Si]

Originally posted by BlackWolf
Im not much one for love poems, I find them dorkey and cheesy but it does sound good, I guess. :confused:

LOL.. yeah, but I gotta do what girls want, man.. we're slaves of the female species.;)

[Shot 2 Hel]

man it sucks jfwy... its better than i could do

[mylittlecivic]

i think its good, some grammer could be changed but youre a guy and its just sweet:yes:

[silver]

all that matters is that it came from the heart, i'm sure she'll like it.

[cjblade54]

I agree with silver... its from the heart and thats what it matters. :yes:

[Grip72]

good job man, i worte a poem or two back in the day when i was with one of my ex's. sounds good and as long as its from the heart, she'll go insane over it!

[Numbstruck]

I uh...I hate poetry......alot....

but good job anyway!

[ebpda9]

i got a bone, and you can chew it
if you like it doggy style
baby we can do it ;)
woof like a dog ;)

now how about mine ?

[ef9civic]

haha

[Numbstruck]

now.....now i love poetry...

lol

[zm_dawg]

well the effort was there......wish i had the patience to sit and write somethin half decent....i'm better off sittin face to face and letting it out.....